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Mar 2021

Do try this one

Rosenasty
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an action comic about a group of dysfunctional demon hunters trying to make some cash.

Thanks, Doki! Yeah, your probably right about the updates being too short for Tapas. It was originally for Instagram/done as a way to give me something to do during lockdown, but if I end up posting on Webtoon as well then i’ll definitely consolidate pages and do weekly releases after ur feedback.
Yeah, for sure there are composition issues, I’m hoping that the more I draw it the fewer there will be. But I definitely struggle with composition!

Thanks for taking the time to read it and give notes! I really appreciate it!

Mine is a Romance/Supernatural:
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I just started my comic and haven't uploaded a lot yet but any feedback would be nice, thanks.

I would love some feedback, please react

I'm pretty new to webnoveling and figuring out self-advertising. I'd love to hear your thoughts on Woe to the Jester...

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Thank you for your reaction! I'll definitely have a think about converting to 3rd person - I actually thought about this myself a few chapters in but didn't know whether it would work or not so I never made the switch. Other than the 3rd person thing, I hoped you enjoyed what you read and thank you again for reacting to it!

Always looking for someone to give feedback and possibly get a new subscriber, so why not gives this a try. +react
Genre: Mystery, Humor

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You already got a lot of novels and comics going on... Can I add my novel to the list?

Hey everyone here is my comics that i update every friday
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NINTH UPDATE! (Replies 83-93)

Dan @dsptss78
=I…don’t know how to feel about this. The dialogue feels very on-the-nose and almost…childish?? Like, it reads like something created by a third-grader, although you can tell by the language used that a 10-year-old probably didn’t write it…which makes it uncomfortable…
That, and the art could definitely use some work. =/ Like a lot.

Plot Armor Academy @PriestofDudeism
-A very creative premise; I’ve never heard anything like it…
-I like the art style...It’s a little rough, but in a cute way~
-…Okay, the writing is a little confusing. Even the order of the speech bubbles…in one panel they read left to right, and then in the next they read right to left…das not gud
=So the line between writing a comic about bleh characters and actually writing bleh characters is kind of thin…and I feel like you might be straddling it. ^^;
Like, I can see where the comic is going, and there are some good ideas in there…but in and of itself, it’s more confusing than enjoyable. And this is just the beginning; the meta jokes aren’t even stale yet (and they will get stale eventually. I’m currently re-writing a meta comic, so I know…you gotta have more than that to offer).
I think it could benefit from a good editor, at least to sharpen up the jokes. I feel like there’s actually a lot of humor in there, and if less of it fell flat it would definitely improve the quality of the comic by leaps and bounds.

Doctored Chance: The Unpleasant Preceding of "Pajama Boy" and What Drove Him to Murder @thealooffloof
-I feel like the title is a bit unwieldy…I get that it’s supposed to be charming, but unfortunately it doesn’t really roll off the tongue. And I’m not sure what ‘preceding’ is supposed to mean in that context…
-Eeeee, your writing style is really…something~. Something good, by the way. ^^ It feels so very fresh and novel…and professional, too.
=It’s hard to know what to say…I have no idea what this story will be about. And yet, I enjoy reading it, which is a great sign if I’ve ever seen one. ;] Rock on; can’t wait to see where this goes~

Rosie and the Reaper @akitsukino
-At first I didn’t understand where the story had gone, and I was so confused…that’s what I get for doing this 2 months after the fact, I guess…=P
-This grimm reaper character looks so…oddly innocent. ^^; It freaks me out a little, ngl…
=It’s unfortunate that I got here too late to react to the whole thing, but anyway: overall, it feels kinda basic? =/ I think the art is good— could definitely be better, but it’s already above-average (especially the coloring). The story so far feels kinda predictable, though; doesn’t seem to bring many new ideas to the concept.
…That, and I want to like the Reaper but his face is so uncanny I just can’t look at him. >_<

Thank you so much for checking out Doctored Chance! I know the full title can be unwieldy, but I haven't the heart to change it because it flows the way I (very personally) like. (sort of like "The Hundred Year Old Man Who Jumped Out a Window and Disappeared", where it gives away the premise of the plot but vaguely and rhythmically). It's not for everyone though :sweat_smile: that's very fair

I'm glad to hear you've enjoyed it so far! and that my writing style works. Thanks a million, it's really nice to hear it :purple_heart:

My novel "The Legacy of combat" is inspired by many Shonen battle anime stories. I'll make it simple. If you like Dragon ball franchise, naruto, bleach, one piece, hunter X hunter, yugioh, black clover, etc then come check this out. I want to improve my writing skills through feedback, so please give me comments. Link is below

https://tapas.io/series/The-Legacy-of-Combat2

Please check out my novel I'm writing. It's for people 18 and over only, it does contain mature , graphic, and traumatic scenes and could trigger unwanted memories or reactions for some. :slight_smile: thank you!

If you're still doing these, here's mine!

Come check out mine if you're free! Any feedback is welcome!

25 days later

I have no idea when this thread will finally end…maybe I’ll add it into my weekly schedule so I can get it done; I’d rather not drag it out indefinitely. ^^;

TENTH UPDATE! (Replies 93-103)

Hetero Sakura @Koneko-chan-hai
=Kind of an interesting premise. The art is a little bleh, but you have a skill in composition that makes the whole comic feel more professional. I think it has a bright future~

The Dark Orient @raihasaki
-Some of the first few drawings are a little uncanny looking…with any realistic style, quality control is key.
-Impressive monster design~
=Overall, I think this looks like a good comic. Professional-looking art style, good dialogue & pacing, excellent composition…it’s not the kind of thing I like, but I think it should do well.

The Missing Moon God @YueCross
-I think this is the first story I’ve read in this thread where the writing has an amateurish feel, but sounds good anyway. 0_0 Very interesting…
=So I think this writing’s biggest issue is the pacing/spacing. Events kinda just cluster together without so much as a line break in between; you bring in new and dramatic developments in the span of a single sentence. Like, by the time I realize something serious just happened I’m already 2 paragraphs ahead and wondering what I missed.
You might want to try to write a little more “slowly”; pad things out to give the reader time to absorb what’s happening and actually feel it. A heavenly battle and subsequent MC suicide should take more than one 7-line paragraph to write…I mean, I assume these things are important? If they are, you shouldn’t present them in a way that implies they should be rushed through and skimmed over.

The Legend of the Flower Demon Lord @karinemmarques
-So, both the ‘misunderstood/underdog evil’ AND the ‘training school to become the chosen one’ tropes are in play here…how about that…
-AND the ‘MC girl who is loved by all the boys and hated by all the girls except for her lackey friends’ trope, AND the ‘aiming for the one (1) mysterious boy who rejects all the girls but will probably get together with MC girl in the end’ trope…wow
=I’m probably already coming off as a hater, but I gotta say: this story feels pretty basic. =/
And the main character gives off a lot of Mary-Sue vibes…generally, when you try to write someone as the ‘outcast/oddball’ and also the ‘darling of the school/envy of everyone’ at the same time, you can end up with that effect.
And of course, the ‘not like other girls’ theme…it’s subtle, but it’s definitely there, what with her being implied as the ONLY Princess who’s not there to snag a warrior husband. Mm. T_T

HOWEVER, I have to admit that the premise is actually interesting. So there’s a class of Princesses, who use their looks and charm to recruit Warriors to do quests for them, and a class of Warriors, who compete to get better quests and rewards from Princesses. Like, for once, a fantasy-school class division that has an immediate symbiotic dynamic…that’s not bad.

With that in mind (and the backstory of the Ciels) I think this story could eventually mature into something really neat. But the key word there is ‘mature’…smarter writing is needed, and a lot of it. For one thing, you gotta recognize that all these tropey themes are just that: tropey. They are old, they’ve been done, and most readers over the age of 10 have probably already seen a lot of them.
So when the narrator says something like “Can you BELIEVE we’re actually forced to compete with each other over our LOOKS??”…yes, yes we can. T_T You’re in a princess school in a YA novel; the real surprise would be if you weren’t.

Just…don’t write this story as if it’s even remotely difficult to understand. Focus less on having the MC explain and over-dramatically react to every (fairly predictable) aspect of her ‘quirky’ life, and just…let her live it.

Here is my most popular novel. However I have more on my page so if you're interested, would be honoured for anyone to read them and possibly sub.

I think you'd like this novel I'm writing (unless you don't like unicorns). I just started publishing on Tapas and I appreciate you reading it :grinning:.

Okay I'll give it a try ... no pressure though.

Here is mine, just started though
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