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I've already read a bit of your comic but I'll a bit more of it real quick. (Alright I caught up all the things I said last time still apply except you are getting better at the comedy)

Anyways I'll post my novel in here.

Summary: Jervis T Booker is one of the heroes who defeated the Orc king, and he is looking for his lost daughter, he must find Nash, the man that is taking care of his daughter, along the journey Jervis will make many friends and enemies.

Genre: Action, Fantasy, Drama

This is a character that was introduced in most recent chapter.

@CommanderMarty I think you have a really interested premise for a story. Good job. I did have a hard time grasping the flow of the story since the story wasn't in the standard paragraph format and there weren't tons of sensory details. That being said, we have different writing styles and if you like how it's done. That's cool too.

Here is my story.

You mean the pacing when you said the flow? And I do need to improve on the details for sure. Thank you for the feedback.

I like the idea of a read for read thread significantly better than a sub for sub thread. Sub for sub just creates dead subs which hurt your series. Many creators here dislike sub for sub.

Hello guys.I am the writer of a webtoon called peek a boo and we recently came out with our prologue.Pls do check it out :grin::grin::grin:

@DiscountedArtist finally got around to reading your comic! I like your humour style so far, it kind of reminds me of cyanide and happiness. I like the simplicity of it as well.

Here is my sci-fi novel, Vehementia -

@DiscountedArtist Maybe its worth telling people to leave feedback for the person above them?

@cherrystark I've been trying to get to your story for a minute so I'll give feedback on it here. Definitely a strong start with a great hook, but I'm sure you knew that. I love the magical/fantastical way that you describe technology (very Artemis Foul)

Here's Lacuna, should anyone be interested~

Hello I was wondering if you could give feedback on our prologue​:grin:.Only if you are okay with it

I would love to. The thread calls for a sentence of feedback on someone else's work before posting your own though, so I don't want to ignore @DiscountedArtist 's rules. Maybe leave some feedback first?

Its really pissing me off that many of the users posting in this thread are ignoring those rules.

Its okay to flag people for being off topic. Its how community members can keep others from spamming self promotion. I like to give a chance for people to correct themselves first, but don't be afraid to hit that flag icon if its something you see often.

Its perfectly fine. Everyone is new once. Just be sure to read the rules when posting to a thread.

I read ur episodes till the one called "English", I won't lie but none of them made me laugh,
So for me I think u should improve comedy and face expressions, but the artstyle is cool I have no problem with it
but what attracted me is that episode " English "

So I just wanna know, were you making fun of arabic because the character said
(تحدثوا مثل هاذا )
Which literally means ( they spoke like that )

I hope you explain ur point because I didn't get

And here's my novel

● Name: Age of Magic

● Genre: Fantasy, Action, Mystery, Magic

● Summary:
500 years ago, people believed that a great earthquake divided a huge continent into three ones . These three lived in peace until the day when a village got destroyed leaving one survivor. A boy named Leo, but little did he know of the adventure that awaited him.

● Why should you read it ?
Hmmm, If you like elves and demons or dragons, it's gonna be here, if you wanna see the journey of boy who lost everything and wants to get stronger in order to get his revenge, it's also gonna be here, if you like magical stuff, and how it works ( There're available episodes that explain magic how it works " The origin of magic " check them out if you wanna know how, and let me know ur opinion about it )

● Hopefully you check it out