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Nov 2023

If anyone is interested, I'd love to get a full and complete critique of my story, Donnie The Fighting Psychopath. Ideally, from someone who has not read it, but any and all critiques are more than welcome.

GENRE: Dark Comedy, Horror, Drama, Satire, Psychological Fiction, Supernatural Fiction, Fantasy.

It has 14 episodes, each containing 18 - 25 pages.

Would greatly appreciate…
- Noting anything you particularly loved or hated
- What you thought of certain characters at certain times. (i.e. what you gleaned from a character after their introduction)
- Any suggestions for how the series/story could’ve been benefited, or what you felt held it back.

Let me know if you’re interested, and send the critique via DM. Be as thorough or basic as you wish.

For better quality (and less chances of spoilers go here): https://sites.google.com/view/donnie-the-fighting-psychopath/episodes/crumble-beginnings

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I tried to read the first episode till the end but the font makes it hard to follow. It's a bit blurry and sometimes it's very little to read on the phone.
I like the concept of Donnie being a somewhat normal in the middle of psychopaths people.

I'm well aware of the font/text boxing issues in the first episode. (most consistent complaint) But It gets much better from there.