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Aug 2021

From the start, I'm stating clearly that this is specifically a grammatical issue about specific characters.

How would you write about a mysterious character without using "he" or "she"?

If this character is addressed in such a way, it could spoil the major identity reveal happening later on. Not sure how to get around using pronouns, though.

I've considered using "it" because there are elements that suggest the character is not human. I think that may make the suspense seem forced and too obvious, though.

Any suggestions? Was I vague enough? LOL

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Maybe you can use "they" if they look vaguely human, and when more inhuman details are revealed maybe you can switch to "it".

"They" is a gender-neutral pronoun that can be both singular and plural, and has been used in such ways for a long time :slight_smile: It seems to confuse people sometimes because they may have never come across singular they/them but...for real, it's been in use for a long time.

You can also vary it by saying "...he--or perhaps a she--proceeded to tell the others that...". Or refer to them as whatever noun they are. "The assassin" can be "the killer" and "the slayer" every now and then. Or have someone just decide to refer to them with a gendered pronoun that everyone else may intentionally or accidentally follow along with.

"You're a dude, right? You're probably a dude. You're just a he to me for now, kay?" (assuming they don't correct them and don't mind). I don't know if that's applicable for the structure of the story or anything but.... :sweat_smile:

@wispysing and @emmzy

"They" is definitely a good option. Thank you both! I'll see if that works.

:joy: This is great!

they/them, depends on situation ,maybe even some "title" name like detective (okay this came out of no where but you get my point), maybe even "that person"....
In my novel i used him, for one character that i wanted to hint at but didn't want to say who he is lol

Using only their title was my thoughts, too, but there will be times I have to use a pronoun. I see another vote for they/them! Thank you so much!

The shape. The shadow, the entity, the figure, or better yet, use a clever metaphor that relates to the character's, well, characterization. Warp the entire prose to fit in with it, if you want to be extra thematic about it.

While I'm probably of an older school of thought on the matter, I don't particularly like using 'they' unless it's a literal hivemind we're talking about because anyone outside of the diversity loop will inherently be somewhat be confused by this being used as a singular pronoun. It may infer a nonhuman entity, but it's preferable if you don't even want to give away the mystery figure's apparent gender. Hell, that sense of otherness can work to your advantage if it's appropriate.

In terms of it feeling forced, using they instead will only barely mask the idea that it is, indeed, forced. But if you want it to feel organic, make it organic. Don't be afraid to let a few crucial hints slip through if the situation genuinely calls for it; it's one thing to intentionally hide things from the reader, but if they never realize it they'll never get a taste of that hidden depth that you've woven into the story. In short, secrets are planted to be discovered, don't forget that.

you can use person, individual, a nickname or a single letter to keep it a mysterious

@MShadowlawn Same for me. I'm 49 and "they" was used in plural form only. My writing professor years ago would have killed me if I had done that lol. These days, however, it seems almost common. I'm going to write some paragraphs in multiple ways and see what works best.

This is one secret that relies on a few red-herrings, which I'm having fun installing lol.

It's always been used in casual speech but only in the past 10 or so years has it become common in journalism and even academic writing.

If you want to be extremely grammatically formal, "one" is the correct non-pronoun. "This one" and all of that. It's really hard to keep a pronounless character going for a long time though.

@thedude3445 It sure is! LOL That's why I'm struggling for a solution. Thankfully, I haven't written it yet. I'm preparing notes.

I wrote a whole story without ever giving the MC a name, just a title: the Professor. Of course, in my case I didn't mind that gender was known, but I think you might be able to sometimes use a title instead of proper names or pronouns. Just my 2 cents (devalued because of inflation to something like 0.2 cents).