@lunaartemisasama I thought it was pretty unique, while it doesn't particularly peak my interest I wouldn't be surprised if the story didn't catch someone elses. I'm not sure at some point between the 1st and second episode I got a little lost on who was who, what they were doing, I mistook the liliana as hitting on the bar tender for some strange reason. 5/10 (It's not for me, and it didn't catch my immediate attention until about the end of ch. 1)
@BobbyjoeXforgotensb It's got a cute opening, simple and character building, in a short amount of time you have a pretty decent understanding of the two main characters. Has the prologue been updated in anyways, cause some parts of it look like they were redone most notably the scene in which the clock breaks. There's this rule about writing in which starting any movie/book with a morning routine is suicide, but honestly it's not that big of a deal if you're capable of doing it right so kudos for doing that. My only real turn off which unfortunately is in a lot of comics is the status bar to describe your character, it's just one of those things that would be put at the end of a chapter and some info could be informed through the dialogue or imagery from the comic it self. Not a big deal just something that is a small turn off. 8/10 (It's a cute and charming start)
@Chita I'm already subbed to your comic, but I don't really know if I ever mentioned why I subbed so here's just a quick recap of why I subbed. Based on the prologue you have an already established world/rule created for your story. To me a fantasy that doesn't have a set rule of power is a turnoff for me cause it just means the writer can throw in any bs they want to at any time with no explanation (Naruto being the biggest example for me). The atmosphere of the market scene also caught my attention the first time around, something I always like to see in a fantasy/sci-fi comic is utilizing a unique universe and giving it life. I personally am a fan of slow openings that establish a setting. (8/10 I'm looking forward to chapter 3 when it comes out).
@Azifri I could tell right away that this wasn't going to be for me, but I tried to keep an open mind on it. The way you formatted your comic (I only read the first episode keep in mind), did leave a sense of mystery, if there's one credit I give to mobile phone format of comics you can come up with some pretty unique paneling using traditional methods to convey the mood of a story. I did have a hard time focusing with the constant time leaps, just the whole "What happened during that time" "How did she come to this conclusion" "If the Neogene corporation is behind this, why didn't they try and kidnap her too within that month?" My biggest issue with a story like this is that it's grounded in some reality with ours, so naturally I will relate it with what would realistically happen if this was a real incident, like where's the security cameras, how come there's no security guards watching this super important discovery, is no one else actually attempting to mimic this formula and if so wouldn't they want to be close to this woman as well? I know with mystery type comics you have to leave room for questions, but it has to be questions like how will they get out of this situation and what's the over arching story? 6/10 (It is an interesting idea of someone creating potential immortality)
@TheFalseVyper another one I'm already subbed to... Probably hear this a lot, I love your art style, I think it's gorgeous, It reminds me of Whispwill, blah blah blah, let's talk about the story instead cause I'll just spend the entire time talking about how pretty everything looks. I have a love for the trope of overly powerful female can take on an army by themselves and she's kind of crazy too +5 points on that. I think the entirety of the house scene was an interesting part of the prologue, it's a tone setter, you get an idea of the antagonists character and her playful nature, and the fear of what's going to happen (no spoilers) after the initial interactions. 10/10 (I don't know I get too distracted with how nice everything looks to really seek anything wrong... I mean some minor grammatical errors are present, I actually ended up reading the whole prologue again without feeling any different about it the second time so, yea good stuff. Looking forward to catching up with it)
@kazukitakamura126 It feels unfair to really rate this in the state that it's at now, but I do like the art in this work. I like the unique panel changes to help establish tone and mood in certain panels. To be honest when I read something that starts off with a break-up with zero indication of a relationship to begin with my immediate thought process goes to "goofy rom-com" more than drama/romance, I mean we don't even see the childhood friends face, and because I don't know what she looks like or even what kind of history they might have had together, I don't care that she's not interested in the main protagonist, especially since a new girl shows up on the last page available and is seen on the cover with the main protagonist. Even if there was some kind of moment where we see a picture of the two as kids would be enough to establish their relationship more. Like I said there isn't really enough pages for me to really give this a fair judgement so I will just go with 6/10 (I'll be sure to check it out again in the future and see if my thoughts change, but as is this is my honest opinion).
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