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Hello, I'm fairly new to making a digital webcomic and would like to know
What do you think of my art, story and story flow?

I'm making a page daily and working very hard but not publishing It and really making those pages for a buffer.
Do you have any aditional tips??

The most recent art is at the beginning and planning to correct inconsistencies starting page like 6,

Feel free to include your webcomics I love reading new stories ^^

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Ok just went trough it, and actually added too since I think there is potential there.

As for the comic itself, the story feels like something realistic, a real life danger such as a disease, don't know whatever or not there will be fantasy elements later. You got to always try to connect realistic concepts when applying fantasy ones, it feels more unique and not generic "another one of those comics type of thing", but right now it feels pretty solid.

Art style is very appealing and colourful (Disney-ish too), your skyscapes are very well done with a soft touch to then, which again makes it for a realistic look and landscapes are also very good and impressively detail at times. I wont go trough too much as you only have so much content right now, but do carry on and you will see your art improve further in no time.

As for the speech bubbles, they occupy too much of the pages, try to make then smaller as well as the font, it is not require for it to be that big, unless you specifically targeting Smartphone users. On a PC however it feels exaggerated.

But yeah do carry on with your work and I shall keep an eye, its leading to an interesting storytelling.

If you want something else to read, you could try Acroalis, a fantasy with Sci-Fi elements comic I been working on for a few years.

Thank you so much!!

It means so much to me how you took the time to give such a detailed feedback, It's beautiful the way you write. Thank you, I will work hard and ask for beta readers feedback so Tapastic readers like the reading (hopefully).

I was worried the little amount of pages and low interacting I have for now in Tapastic meant the story in the beginning isn't appealing enough, but I guess It's a slow process

Yes, I'm targeting smart phone users! It's one of my priorities because from what I knew (and even myself) there is many people that read comics on their phone. Though I do worry If they take that much space If It could become annoying to website users, so I will have to double check.

Wow! Your art is so refined! I'm checking It out right now <3

Thank you again :slight_smile:

Your art style is beautiful. It reminded me of disney movies in a good way.

You managed to set the tone and the starting conflict in the story. The phrase at the beginning about the danger of things that are only beautiful during a season calls people attention. This can be foreshadowing for an interesting turn of events. Use it wisely.

You only have 3 pages for now, so i can't say too much about how the plot is going. Use your chances to show the character's personalities. When the readers feel like they "know" the character or want to know them better. That is the point where you hook them to the story.

Having a buffer is a smart move and completely reccomended, but make sure you publish enough pages to establish the kind of story you want to tell. For example, in the first week, if time is not an issue, you may publish daily pages. And then go to the 1 page per week while building a buffer.

I think you have a good beginning.

Here is my webcomic. Is a comedy that parodies the classic stories about a chosen one saving the world, but with a twist: the main character is an actual inanimate rock.

No worries, and thank YOU for the support as well, and the writing compliment definitely makes really happy to hear as someone who's English isn't birth language xD.

Let's support each other xD.

looks promising- I been watching your 100 days of comic series on youtube!

Wow! Thank you!

It's exciting, you have been since the Behind the Cameras part lol >.<

Literally taking notes of your advice, going to review the story. Thanl you so much for giving notes on exactly the stuff that called your attention, that helps a lot.

I will take into account all feedback. Uploading daily does sound like a good idea, I will consider It strongly. Also the character development tips

Lol! I will check your comic gladly, sounds funny! Thank you so much!

I love the way you use the backdrop to compliment your panel color scheme. It's a really creative way to make the scenes flow. Not sure if it's possible to do it more frequently and emphatically but I especially like how you have the backdrop really reflect, nighttime, windy, sunny etc..

love the art style, and how you set the tone, the panelling is perfect for readers and the setting has started in an intriguing way 10/10 in that

if I could nitpick one thing it would be that you narrate a bit to much at the start, an example of this was the part where you where saying "Far away from everything in the other side of the mountains in a small cabin lives a small family" we can see its in a mountainous area and that it is far away since you already drew it, don't say when you can show is a golden rule for movies and comics

but that's just my nitpick

other than that this is a great beginning, also try apart from making a buffer, making sure keep updating and adding to the buffer, one moment and all those pages disappear

here's my webcomic, it's mostly about a lil'dragon kid and some not so friendly people going on a journey in a forest

I almost skipped this, but I'm glad I didn't. I have subscribed to your webcomic and found it captivating.

  1. I enjoyed the landscape and sparkles.
  2. I really liked the girl...how she was focusing on the beautiful flowers.
  3. Danger is forshadowed, which makes me care for her.
  4. Not only that, her parents are sickly
  5. I love how you draw them, the hands, body.

You don't have to make the fonts so large. There are a whole lot of great free fonts at Blambot Comic Fonts & Lettering

I've heard that Anime Ace font is really good for comic dialog. But you may find another more suitable to your taste. Check out other popular webcomics here at Tapas to see how their dialog and bubbles are done. That should give you a good reference.

I've heard others mention having a buffer. That will help you and any of us comic makers tremendously. You won't be as pressured either, getting your comic updated here.

Also...I find narratives coming from the actual character draw me in closer. I think you should make the girl, the star of your story, speak in her own voice. I feel your story will have more impact if you go in that direction. We, as the audience, will relate more to the girl and her dilemma. We'll feel her pain and joy, which you do a very good job through drawing her. Also you can interject her style of thinking/viewpoint with those words.

Congratulations on presenting your story here. I really thank you and will comment, have fun, and hope for more. I'm looking forward to you touching on my story too. I'm new as well, though I've been working on mines for quite some time.

Don't be discouraged. I've heard it takes a couple of years to be substantiated here. So here's success to both of us! Luv n hugs to you, @mgart1937

Hey there! Already added your comic. I love the colour scheme and how you have drawn landscapes. The character's are simple, but sometimes it is best to keep oc's simple and to not go crazily over the top. The storyline seems pretty interesting, overall a good read. Can't wait for more! Also enjoy your day/evening! :smile:
Also if you have time, I would appreciate feedback on my comic: https://tapas.io/series/Rupert--Rascal--Escape-The-Neighbourhood

You have such a good style and voice so far! The font is large,simple and good, so mobile friendly. Your style of clean lines, minimal shading, and Disney-que features should make it enjoyable for a wide audience. Backgrounds are solid and with a clear understanding of color theory. Here are my two suggestions for things to work on:
Make sure to figure out the panel and how the characters are actually involved in the movement. For example, for where the little girl tries to hug her mother, the perspective is a little off, where the horizontal line marking the end of the cabin should be placed a little lower, for as it is shown now, it appears to be from a slightly Arial view. if you were attempting that elevated view, then the characters should have been demonstrated from a slightly higher angle.

Secondly, consider the transition of scenes. In that same hugging scene, you choose to have a secondary panel with a the father appearing shocked. perhaps a more powerful moment would have been made if you show the hug facing the mother with the father standing behind, expression visible (kind of how you did in the later panel when he pulls them apart).
Overall, very good work. Just make sure to consider the purpose of each panel. I have this own issue in my own comic1 but I have been working on learning how to use panels to build suspense and pace. Best of luck!
--Viki

I'm so glad
Going to try to develop a sense to continue doing It better
Thank you for your kind words!

I love cats so I had to add your comic. I love how you choose the color for the ladscapes specially and think your character design is cute.

I never thought of using an entire page as a panel, that was pretty creative. I caught up quickly which is a relief, because I like being up to date with stories. I will look forward to support your growing art and series ( way more easily than others with 10000 chapters) lol :smile:

Thank you very much! Your advice was very useful

Definitely need to practice perspective and another friend also commented he got confused at that transition paneling. The way you described It was so clear, so thank you. My friend didn't know how to express It like you did, and It's obvious that the artist is you who gave a more solid advice.

I must say, I'm most pleased by your Art's comic and storytelling, just looking at first chapter. It really is refreshing to be honest, someone working so hard on coloring and drawing. I think I can learn quite a lot from your skill and looking forward to read your story.

-Mg

Thank you! I understand where you're coming from with the narration, will keep It in mind.

I don't quite understand what do you mean with "All those pages disappear"? I guess what you're trying to say is to not get overly confident with a buffer and continue producing, is that right? Which is good, thanks!!

Going to check your comic out
There are many so while I add them I may take a while reading them, but your dragon's design is so cute! My favorite thing from your comic, though I haven't read much lol

Thank your for the advice and compliments! It means so much >_<

The narrating voice will change to hers as soon as possible then, maybe not the first issues but what you said is extremely helpful.

Also thank you! I think I will change the fonts size, thank Tapastic that's possible because there is some annoying factor for those to being so huge.

I'm so glad I like your art style in your comic, looking forward to put me up to date with It and being a fellow creator with you. Love and hugs to you too! Glad we can support each other :smiley:

This looks very promising! The art is gorgeous and the story is griping so far. For things to improve, I'd definitely work on the text and speech bubbles. They are enormous, the font is too big as well, and the text itself cuts in weird places and the English feels a little wobbly at times. Like the sentence structure doesn't quite flow and some of it feels unnatural, which isn't helped by the fact that it cuts several times in the middle of each sentence because the text is so big. You are obviously putting a lot of effort into the art, but remember that the bubbles and text are also part of the story and you have to put just as much thought into that :slight_smile: Best of luck!