Hello everyone! I would love to get some feedback on a character I’ve been working on, and I’d really appreciate your insights. :slight_smile:

Character Name: Eden Asmara (Nickname: Crocodile Asmara)
Background: She comes from humble origins, a commoner.

Friends: She has friends from the common folk, including a friend named Eva, who is afflicted by the "Budah" (similar to the Evil Eye).

Artifact: Eden wears a tooth from a Suchomimus, a dinosaur from the Mesozoic Era (Jurassic period). It symbolizes her connection to nature and the Earth's core (the creation of the Earth), although in reality, it’s just a crocodile tooth.

Clothing: She wears traditional mudcloth from Central Africa (Niger).

Spirit Animal: Eden has a nature spirit that is either a small Spinosaurus or a small Suchomimus. The Spinosaurus is known for its sail-like back and was a fish-eater, while the Suchomimus was also specialized in catching fish but was smaller and discovered in Niger.

I’d appreciate your thoughts on the following points:

Credibility & Depth: Does the dinosaur tooth as an artifact and symbol of her connection to the Earth and nature feel fitting, or does it seem over-the-top?
Spirit Animal: Which of the two dinosaurs (Spinosaurus or Suchomimus) do you think fits better as a spirit guide for Eden?
Cultural Influence: How do you feel about the mix of African clothing and dinosaur elements? Do you have any suggestions for further integrating these themes more seamlessly?
I’m looking forward to hearing your feedback and suggestions for improvement! Thank you in advance! :blush:

Here’s the character sheet for Eva as well!

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