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Feb 2021

Hello there! Thank you for this thread. I just read the first chapter and the short introduction or prologue you added into your story Darkly Ever After, and all I have to say is... wow. Your first chapter was heavy and deep, in a good way though. The way you set the tone for your story was amazing, in my opinion. Honestly speaking, I was really hooked in already! Your setting was also very descriptive, and that's quite nice. I think it's a story that would hook in a lot of readers very soon. I was really intrigued, so I left likes for you! Anyway, here's my novel! I'd appreciate any critique you can give me. It would be very helpful. Thank you! :smiley:

Agshdjejdieksk thank you (I knew I was forgetting something) finally is weekend and can read it!

Edit: I got hooked immediately to the story with the introduction at first because Tamara and later becasue you could describe these situations with a raw feeling (I felt like I was witnessing that scene) and got focussed on Tamara's mom cause I met similar people like them and I couldnt but feel so frustrated as Tamara in that momment. I want to know more now! Subscribed!

honestly it's a good chapter, and I don't know enough about the story to say if it needs to have a chapter before introducing and leading up to that (because I'm assuming that this chapter is super plot important, so it probably needs to be there) It was just that there was no mention of surviving abuse in the blurb/prologue episode so it caught me off guard? Maybe having a little tiny hint in the blurb so people know what to expect?

I'm not sure what I would do, honestly, since I have only seen the two episodes.

I would really love feedback! It's the introduction chapter! Please leave your feedback on the forum!

I would love some feedback, thank you for doing this :smiley:

You can put the critique here on forums :smiley:

Thank you so much! I'll definitely be sure to go back over it! I just read your first chapter, and it's really intense, and does a great job hooking the reader! I wish you the best luck with your series! Thank you again! :heart:

I would appreciate any constructive criticism you might be able to give me too - I'm always looking to improve :slight_smile:

omfg your story is lit! I even commented, idk if you can see that yet.
Can’t wait for the next chapter. Pacing is pretty good, descriptions in the right amount, and yeah its pretty good for now.

heres my comic! the first 3 are meant to be read as one but id be happy with you just reading the first too, id like the crit on the forum please!

Just finished my first chapter! Would love to hear your feedback :slight_smile:

Always interested to see what people think and how I can improve :slight_smile:

Hi! My first chapter came out almost 2 years ago but why not see what new readers think, right? The artwork isn't great in the first, so this should be a good test of the story

Thank you so much for the review! :hugging: And thanks for taking the time to do this. Much appreciated :pray:🏻

Well the first three episodes are the first chapter of my comic, so give it a read and let me know what you think of it. Feedback does help a lot, thanks.

feel free to choose if you'd like to critique mine! I'd appreciate if you send the feedback in the forum if you decide to critique it.

Before leaving my Series, I'll proceed with the Comment on your first chapter:
Love how the first Episode introduce everything like a movie trailer, with the blurb and the list of cast, it's quite creative for a novel, I gotta admit.
Love how the first real episode already set the tone, if not, how in part relatable that is, having partially experienced something slightly similar when I was a kid, so, maybe it's also something more subjective speaking, but still, it sets the tone quite well, might not be my kind of genre, but still.

So, from episode 1 to 5 actually made up the first Chapter (Or technically correct "Prologue") of the story, then each Chapter following the two interludes act all as singular stories (As it is an Anthology, for now).
As the first chapter is divided in 5 pieces, It would be better to leave the feedback here on the forum.


Enjoy your Stay, Have a nice day!