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May 2019

I like your use of shadows on the falling woman. Also great job on the panels!

I really like the falling women one too. It has more contrast with the large areas of black and white. It makes it an interesting composition. The comic panels are good but not as eye catching as that first picture. I think because the page has more white areas and no contrasting dark areas.

Either way it’s good! It’s very hard to do black and white comics and this is very nice!

The falling woman looks pretty good, and so do the other panels.
You could do more with backgrounds. It's fine if you have already established the background in previous pages, but just looking at it here it's feeling pretty bare. Also there could be more consistency in shading in the second page.
Overall, it's pretty solid, well done, black and white art

I'm loving the angle and composition of the falling panel. Your shading is really good as well! Your panels are quite expressive as well so overall it's great!

Agreeing with everything here. The art is definitely nice :smile:

I do think the hand-written text looks a little awkward. I'd consider doing the lettering digitally even if the rest is done on paper. Otherwise, making sure the text is vertical and leaving a little more space around the edges of the speech balloons would help IMO.

I'm liking what you got so far! The only thing that I would suggest is adding texture. right now it's falling a little flat because the characters and the backgrounds share the same values. Texture (either in the characters or background) would give more contrast, depth, and pump up the drama.

I think it looks nice!
Super stylized, gives a traditional vibe kinda?
The lines behind p2 panel 1 skip a beat at the top which looks a little funny.

Otherwise, I’d maybe look into using screentones or crosshatching, or just drawing in backgrounds on some of the panels because right now they’re looking a little bare which is taking away from an otherwise great composition.
You can also just blackout some of the backgrounds for mood like in p2 last panel?

thank you for your feedback, it really helps
just for clarifying, in the first image she is not falling, she is underwater ) i´ll add some gradient there :stuck_out_tongue: