I'll Review Your First Chapter! (closed (for right now))

Harshitx 2024-10-07 17:16:07 UTC #10

To be honest i have some subcribers but i need a honest review for my series please if you can try then please try tp give a review
https://tapas.io/series/SEA-OF-REVENGE

vfaqvrf 2024-10-07 17:26:44 UTC #11

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LOKIEL 2024-10-07 17:45:47 UTC #12

Thank you for the review!

Do the relationship dynamics seem natural? Is the pacing good? How is the world building?
You can cover whatever you want!
I switch characters point of views, does the switching make sense?
Honest critique!

mikesakatamaki 2024-10-07 18:13:45 UTC #13

Thank you for your honest opinion.
I didn’t include a joke in Episode 1.
I realize now that it’s not good to have no jokes in a comedy, and I missed that.
I’m grateful to you for pointing it out.

As you said, "Mikesaka" is the family name.
I want to create a proper comedy, and to do so, I’ll study more about the culture of English-speaking countries.

I’m happy you said my art is cute.
I’ll do my best to keep the good points while reducing the flaws.
Your review gave me motivation.
Thank you so much!

iamanerd 2024-10-07 19:48:50 UTC #14

Hi, apologises but this is only open for those with less than 50 subscribers. c:

iamanerd 2024-10-07 19:49:30 UTC #15

Hi, can you please provide me more details on things you would like me to focus on?

iamanerd 2024-10-07 19:53:02 UTC #16

Hi, based on what I could access it is difficult for me to make a review for this one chapter. Is every book its own chapter?

Right now, for me, I am not feeling anything but confusion. Instead of making each chapter its own book keep it together in one big book. I also think this is a book that needs to be interactive withe audience. What ways can you hide details? Could you add hyperlinks to videos?

iamanerd 2024-10-07 19:56:12 UTC #17

Hi, I know you mentioned that you have other novels with more than 50. So, I just wanted to make sure you want me to still review it or if you changed your mind c:

iamanerd 2024-10-07 19:56:33 UTC #18

Hi, apologises but this is only open for those with less than 50 subscribers. c:

Rowan_Lane 2024-10-07 20:07:13 UTC #19

Hey thanks for this!

1.) Is the start too slow? Do you think the MC is making smart choices? is the prose interesting?

2.) There's nothing really i don't want feedback on

3.) the pacing

vfaqvrf 2024-10-07 20:30:28 UTC #20

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Leyelle 2024-10-07 21:48:13 UTC #21

I would like you to if you're willing, but its fine if you don't think i'm elligible lol. One of my novels is over 50 subs, the other two are under thirty subs

Kyanbu 2024-10-07 22:31:56 UTC #22

Is it easy to follow along with the story? Is the dialogue ok? Is the pacing too fast?
Nothing, it's all fair game!
The pacing and dialogue.
Be as brutally honest as you need to be. It doesn't have to be positive.

ZAPPI 2024-10-07 22:46:08 UTC #23

1) Does my story do a good job at setting up the characters and plot?

2) Nothing, really

3) Mainly just the way the story sets itself up, the way the characters are introduced, and dialouge

4) Nope.

BellaTheCow 2024-10-08 00:48:58 UTC #24

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Tubacabra 2024-10-08 12:53:41 UTC #25

Thanks for taking the time!

Are my character interactions too forced? Does my introduction have the right emotional impact? Is the story engaging for readers?
Cover anything you want!
Please focus on my characterization.
Be as scathing as possible! I can take a hit.

Thanks in advance!

Harshitx 2024-10-08 13:57:40 UTC #26

It will be great if you tell me what do you feel while reading the first chapter of my novel and is it good or not

MeadowHaven 2024-10-08 14:58:57 UTC #27

Is it enough to hook people without directly revealing what is about to happen? is there enough foreshadowing? are the Characters relatable?
grammar, I know it's a problem. i plan to go back and fix it later when I'm not behind my deadlines.
is it compelling enough to keep reading
be as negative as you like.

https://tapas.io/series/Life-sentence-The-Endless-Game/info

Paul_Tromba 2024-10-08 15:21:44 UTC #28

I would love your input on my first chapter.
1. Is the first chapter intriguing/captivating to you?
2. Is the pacing good or too slow?
3. Is there enough mystery to entice people to read further?

You can cover anything you want as I find that limiting one's critique leaves the author with much less helpful information.

I would love for you to focus on the characters and plot but am open to any other suggestions.

I am open to any review, whether harsh or not. Thank you again.

kyupol 2024-10-08 16:14:35 UTC #29

Sure feel free to review