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Jul 2020

Hey hey, people, I've recently been thinking about rewriting and revising my current story Aberdeen's Anthology. I wanted to remove some fluff and filler that my original had, as well as go more in the "show, don't tell" writing style (I also made a lot of cosmetic changes).

If any of you would like to read and comment on my revised intro and first chapter, I'd really appreciate it

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I think you need to work more on setting things up in the prologue, getting people on board the concept. But it seems alright to me.

Prologue meaning introduction or Chapter 1? You mean like hook people in more? Any ideas on what I could add?

Like you say a lot of things but need more context as to how people think of left handed people generally. It seems like a lot of information to put up front.

Well, I actually just completely rewrote the introduction. I felt like that wasn't necessary information for the readers yet. Instead, I just talked about the narrator, his goals, and his intrigue in the town of Plainwood