Hello Doublemelon~
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The cover
The animation on the gif is a nice touch! A bit wobbly though.
The title is bold and easy to read and since the story is a BL, the pose is nice too.
The Summary
Under normal circumstances, no way these two men would fall for each other. Until... intimidation and power open up the door for romance.
The summary is vague. Who are these two men? Why shouldn't they fall for each other? What exactly is it about intimidation and power that opens romance for them? Does one use intimidation to shove open that door? What happens in the beginning of the story specifically that I should look forward to?
Essentially if you tell me who the two men are, why they shouldn't fall in love and the inciting incident (what situation/action forces that door to romance open)--then it's more likely to hook a reader that does check out the summary first.
I like the cover and it'd entice me to click on your comic, but since I read the summary, I'd enter it feeling a bit iffy about the story since it doesn't actually tell me much.
The First Part
The narrative is not my cup of tea. (I love BL but not so much high school romances) But that's okay, cause that's not my focus here.
I read the first six episodes and what I'll say you do well is turning around expectations. The reader, and protagonist, does one thing expecting a certain result and it ends up being the opposite, that's good writing.
However, what I didn't really learn right away is...their names, I think. It's hard to get attached to the story if I don't even know/remember the characters names.
The text is legible in the speech bubbles, which is good. The grammar can feel a bit off at times in some turns of phrase, so I'd pay closer attention to that.
The sound effects however (and perhaps this is a pet peeve of mine), don't need to be literal actions. The drawing + motion lines is enough for actions that are like a "grab" or 'reveal!' or 'a shiny guy appears' , You can draw those things clearly and make that guy's background shiny enough for the 'show don't tell' principle to apply. Generally speaking, if it doesn't make an actual sound, it's not a sound effect.
Overall though the first six episodes does set up the story and the dynamic between the two main leads and ends with an introduction of a third. I like that the protagonist is actively trying to change his situation and dealing with consequences; you don't always see that.