SEVENTH UPDATE! (Replies 46-55)
I’m back! Comments will be a bit brief this time around; I’m supposed to be resting.
The Dark Children of the Night @RyzaCobalion
-Eek, tense switching…why does everyone do this??
=Overall, I think the writing is actually okay? Although the descriptions are a bit boring, the dialogue has a nice flow. Work on that tense, though.
M.A.D.E. Elements @alextsarace
-Gives me both Avatar and RWBY vibes simultaneously…
-The art is a little rough, but cute~. The expressions of the characters are solid.
-The dialogue, however, clearly needs some editing…
=Overall, kinda basic. =/ But I wouldn’t call it a bad comic.
Peacemaker Chronicles @JalenET
-Is it weird that I’m getting Mob Psycho 100 vibes from this? Like, I’ve never seen the show, but just the art style and character designs…
-The descriptive text for the ‘monster’ is really distracting…I think you should use another style. Like maybe white text on black blocks, or even just the descriptive square text box that you usually find in comics/manga. Anything to make it look separate, and not like just extra noise cluttering up the scene.
=The humor is a little weird, and the art isn’t the best, but somehow…I dunno, I kinda like it?? ^^; The dialogue is strong and natural-sounding, which is sadly so rare in amateur comics…I feel like that alone makes it more enjoyable than average. I wish you luck with it in the future~
-I’m only a couple panels in, but I gotta say the art is niiiiiiiice~
-I admire your city scenes…I can see that they’re rough in places (sidewalks…) but they do their job, and that’s the most important thing.
=Goddamn, if this comic isn’t the cutest thing. ^^ It feels professional, and yet I can tell that you still have so much more room to keep improving. I can’t wait to see how the story plays out~