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I really enjoy the style and how clean the black grey and white is with this comic. However the walls of text is a bit hard to look past and something that easily dissuades people from reading. I know I myself have had problems with putting too much text on a page and it's a difficult thing to work around but it's definitely worth it. Try spreading the text across more panels. One of the ways I worked around it was limiting how many sentences I out in a word bubble.


This is the newest page of Discount Religion It has some bad language in it so beware.

@azureXtwilight Wow! Action packed scene! I really like the movement you have in your panels-- the blur is very effective. I wonder who the guy with the knife is-- AND-- who was his intended victim? Very cool wink


The Pale 1.19

@atlas Thank you! I wanted to show the scene how the dog's seeing it. I have no idea how it actually is, that's how dogs see scenes that they can't resist helping, in my imagination smile. Also I wanted to give this scene a certain amount of tension.
P.S.: The artwork of your comic looks great!

@agentfink -- I'm very excited about The Pale, first off. Out of the recent crop of new comics that we're both a part of, you're one of the ones that everyone should be watching.

The newest page? Great writing and dialogue. And the art style continues to be striking and effective, even in the less sweeping and more conversational panels. If your goal was to draw and write something that feels like an ominous amalgam of The Walking Dead and True Detective, then you've nailed it. If you didn't have those two franchises in mind as inspiration ... well, you still nailed it.

And now, for the newest page of Atonement1! This page was particularly challenging for us as we continue to try to establish a unique style for the comic.

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I love your gaming references.
You are able to put in so much text! I don't know how I manage but I can only put a few words per bubble. I guess you didn't draw captain falcon in is second panel... I'd love to see on of you attempts on that!

Here's the latest page of Shades Of Men!

Well my most recent page is just concluding a out of control chase scene with the main protagonist getting the jump on no good robbers, Marc meets Captain Howard the captain of the Famousland Police Department. They keep bumping heads, but Howard successfully captures the criminals and and Famousland can have a peaceful night....... or do they...?

Lastest chapter here: http://tapastic.com/series/Maximum-Chaos1

I like the expressive face in panel three. Its like she saw the unspeakable.

You'll have to read the previous two pages to understand the joke here.

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@Toad_Sta_Ovn lol Captain Falcon. I think this page does a good job of showing the important moments in this situation to make the joke really click. I also like what you're doing with the color/tones on this page. It has a clean feeling while still maintaining an interesting texture that matches the rest of the comic well. Nicely done!


Here's the latest page of Reus1. I'm not exactly 100% sold on or committed to all the sound effects here. I don't usually use them, but I thought this time they were necessary to convey the sentiment...idk though. What do you think? is it too much??
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@Cielle This page is too intense and dramatic. I love the bottom last 2 panels, where the girl was really surprised and feel so unease and the guy who is insidious plus with the zoom in of face which gives him some thrill. well im very interested what's next. smiley

and yeah here is my newest page of BOMB A2 Where joji did all his attack but still it useless to his new enemy which might be involve of missing children case in Toril Town.

@gnekomikero Nice action page. I really like those 2 top panels on the left side. They have really good intensity. And the pacing works really well too on the whole page. I'm not exactly sure what's going on in the first panel tho. It might be because I haven't seen the previous page but I can't really place where the jumping figure is going or how how they tried to attack. But really, this is good action page and I like your line work!


Fallacy1 has a wrap for chapter 5 with sad looking people.

@Squeakybat
Because you posted a cover, I went in to read a few pages of your comic... very cute upbeat feeling! I like your attention to detail in your lettering and your emphasis on the reaction of Danny (poor kid! stage fright is horrible!) Your cover art is really good too and reflects what your comic is about and is a good indicator of the overall tone. Good work!


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Ohoho, fabulous perspective and angles here! The balance of the speech balloons to the couples at the tables is really nice, everything is weighted evenly. Super nifty way of depicting his face blindness, too, that's a simple, clear way of illustrating such a condition. I can't believe he just up and leaves, though! No 'pardon me', no excuse, not even a wave. Sompin' for real's going down, haha! She's left in the dark in the next to last panel but doesn't seem too fazed by the last one. The somber expressions are all so focused, I love it. Love it, brilliant page again, man!

Here is the most recent update, page 47, from There's No Such Thing as Jason -- I.T., we've finally gotten our kids back to Jason's dorm complex. I'd planned on it being much more detailed than it came out (underpasses are actually pretty boring, haha). Very excited for the next week of updates, yo yo!

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