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Jan 6

I never watched Naruto so I don’t know how to respond to that
But still thanks for sharing

ahhh, YESSS. me pretending I remember what a comma splice is.

I do that when I write essays for school
I insert commas but never use periods

I LIKE commas. :grin: When I was in school, IIRC, commas in text could be interpreted to mean minor pauses, instead of using ellipses. Does that ring a bell with anyone?

I did some more homework on this. I think I'm guilty of it more than I realized. But this site seemed pretty easy to digest, so I thought I'd share it here (if outside links are okay).

I once shared it with a teacher and she mentioned that the dialogue was too proper. It was like I was writing a paper not two people talking two each other. I've tried to be aware of that in all my future works.

oof sammmme

or rather as I would usually write it; yes I do the same, I occasionally find myself falling into that same trap due to my tendency to get lost in writing the minute descriptions of the scenes I imagine at the expense of pacing and clarity

lol

@nene
that i wrote a grand adventure with so many characters, plots, places on my first manga, should have started small lol now im in too deep hehe :yum:

Introducing too many characters at once :sweat_smile: Some novels/comics can get away with it but I sure can't lol. Nowadays I try to give each new character a fair amount of screen time, and use their name a lot, before introducing the next one.

:comet: Hello

Since I'm looking back through my story, I have to say my common mistake is show don't tell. I see it now and the revisions I'm putting together is making a huge difference.

I got way too bogged down in character feelings. Never fixed it, just found a genre it fit better in. When writing psychological and horror stuff constantly being in a characters head works a lot more than action adventure. My flowery, wordy prose bogged down the pacing because I was trying to write a fast pace story, instead of taking a step back and seeing "hmm. Prose I snapped up from all those gothic horror classics is probably better suited for something more akin to said gothic horror classics..". Trying to juggle a huge cast, while getting stuck in their heads, instead of realising my work is much more suited for watching one or two characters break apart at the seams.

So I guess my mistake was just having the wrong writing style for the genre. I'm not entirely sure how much sense that all makes. But I suppose if your plot is straying, look at what it more strays towards and see if that's what you need to start writing instead.