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This is a very nice paragraph, but I am not sure that you need it in a blurb. Most readers will forget these world-building details by the time they dive in.

I think you could comfortably start your blurb with Ivan, and then take it from there. What is this "Trial Run" and why am I supposed to care about it?

Now this here is much more interesting than the first paragraph. We finally establish character, conflict, and stakes, which is what a blurb needs to do.

I personally do not see much need for these. Most stories are, in some way, about friendship, betrayal, trust, etc. Why should the reader choose yours, over all the others? I know it's tough to strike a balance between making a description intriguing and giving too much away, but try to focus more on the specifics of your own story, and less on the generic.

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This is actually really nice and sweet! I do have a few suggestions to improve flow and give the reader a better taste of what they're getting into.

I think Akiro, a rumored delinquent reads better.

Is being a beauty all that Hinata's known for? I would recommend using character identifiers which are not related to their physical appearance. 'Rumored delinquent' opens up a much better possibility for character conflict than 'sleeping beauty'.

I would break this up in a couple of sentences, I think. And add something specific about this encounter of theirs. The 'character meets character and falls in love' trope abounds in romance stories, so I need to know what sets yours apart from the others

2nd blurb:

This is beautiful, but redundant in the context of your blurb. It doesn't add anything to nor tie in with the rest of the blurb.

Nice conflict set up, though I would love to know more about Dave than his passion for the guitar. She is an openhearted teen who's maybe a bit reluctant about love. He's kind and sincere and plays the guitar. She has a conflict. He does not. I hope that makes sense?

3rd blurb:

This is short and to the point! Characters, check! Conflict, check! Stakes, check! My only suggestion would be to perhaps flesh it out a little, in case the story is on the longer side. Reading this, I am expecting to dive into a short story or novella. But that's just a minor suggestion

Hope that helps!

Yup, not a problem at all!

Thank you, too, for editing the blurb in!

I like how this ties in to the title!

Okay so I get it that Ara is a day-dreamer and dreams of boys, that sets up a nice conflict, but you lost me in the middle a bit. Let's recap:

• Ara is a day-dreamer and hopeless romantic
• Nick is a newly transferred student who loves somebody else
• Naeil, Ara's best friend, is actually in love with Ara and wants to confess

What can she not see coming? And what does this mean: "he loves someone else and came for her who Ara Knows already"? If you could help clarify that, please, I could see if I can think of any suggestions to make the blurb clearer

Hello hello I'll see what I can do

This is a nice set-up of conflict/stakes, however...

...this needs to be fleshed out and broken up. I kind of get a feel for the world, but I'm not really seeing the characters here. Like, what is the story that I am supposed to be following? Is it a villain-centered story? Or are we following Seth Kiah?

If you could give me a few more details, I could try to whip up my own version, to show you what I mean

Haha, no worries, that clears it all up already Let me see what I can do...

A Death-Game ensues when 61 million of the world's population get trapped in Knights & Mages Online. Seth Kiah, the Winner of the Beta Test, has been exiled. The Creator has gone Villain and is hellbent on making everyone's lives harder.

Even though the game is rigged, Seth Kiah and his crew fight to defeat all Bosses of 100 islands and get out of the VR they're trapped in. Because that's their only chance at survival. And Seth hasn't won Beta just so he could die in Alpha.

The game is on.

Okay so I improvised a bit in the middle there, and idk really if the game version following beta is really called alpha lol. But I hope that helps show you what I mean about characters and conflict!

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I think this is redundant here. It tells me nothing about the story or the characters.

This is a good paragraph! I do have a few edits:

In his sleep, Shinichi was able to see the world's true form. Most importantly, he could level up people's abilities and eventually obtain those maxed-out abilities for himself! Thus, he began to collect as many powerful people as possible, so he could return to his former glory...

I like that we're upping the stakes here, the structure is a bit confusing though. How about...

An odd figure who may or may not be Shinichi's mother kept warning him of the dangers to come. "The world's devouring has begun," she cautioned, "and it won't stop until everything's consumed." Or something.

And here I think restructuring could help it flow better:

Well...who cares about the end of the world, anyway? He has other things to do. Best to ignore these ominous warnings that aren't going to help his current situation.

Well, those would be my suggestions! Hope they helped but feel free to ignore them if they didn't!

Haha, nothing wrong with short, especially if the story/comic you're creating is also short
That being said...one single sentence can't convey a whole lot about your characters and conflict

Can you tell us what's the name of the princess? Who/what broke her? Which horrors of the world?

Like I said, short is fine! But it does have to include some specifics which will entice your readers to pick your story, over all the other sorrowful princesses out there. If you can give me a few more details, I could try to whip something up for you!

You're welcome! Honestly, editing be like that - it's easier to do it for other people than for yourself, lol.

Honestly, I think this is really good, especially if your comic is short! It packs conflict and character in two well-paced sentences, which give the readers just enough to leave them wanting more. Are you looking to expand it?

That's so cute! I like. It reads more like a logline than a blurb, though. But, again, if the story is super short, this is probably enough

I like this, too, but I'm a bit confused about the unlikely duo. Which is it? Caleb and the unstable man? Caleb and the angel? The angel and the unstable man? I'm thinking it's probably Caleb and the angel, but it's 'unlikely' that threw me off - why is it unlikely, when you're referring to him having a guardian angel as if it was a normal occurrence?

I think this one could use a bit of expanding, on account of 'alien realm' and 'unknown dangers'. Those are both a bit too vague. And I don't understand surviving as a replacement for being happy If you're not surviving, then you're dead, and you can't be happy anymore

Congratulations Could you please paste the content of the blurb as a post in this topic, for easier editing?

Haha, glad you liked it! Of course, go for it

Happy to help! And yes, that's always the dilemma, heh. As authors, we feel like everything we put into the story is iMpOrTaNt lol, so it's hard to pick and choose.

Maybe you could work those specific words in - survival vs happiness. Off the top of my head, something like...

Survival vs happiness is the name of the game as lively, hopeful Tara ends up stranded in a mind-bending alien realm. She must conquer its unknown dangers to survive...but will she be happy?

Wild improvisation lol. And I just realised I'm not entirely sure what you mean by survival vs happiness

Haha, all right, then!

Ok so this whole first part reads like an exposition. It's all a very interesting set-up, but I have a feeling this is either a previous book or some sort of backstory, and I can't tell yet what it is that I will be reading about.

Here is where the story finally begins, and we only get 3 vague sentences about it. Is Fall the protagonist? What about this distant world? Ok so all the rest was his past, but if he needs to let go of it, why are we reading about it in the blurb? If the story is going to be about Fall on this new world, then I would like to know what his present/future conflict will be on there, rather than what's already happened and I won't be reading about. If that makes sense? Let me know if it doesn't

Haha, thank you! Hope I can help

This is a good start! I would maybe connect the sentences with a comma, rather than a period, like this:

Chippo wakes up surrounded by an eternal mist, not knowing how he got here or why he's all alone.

This is where I get a bit confused. How do the ordered packages come into play? If he is in some place he doesn't know, how does he end up ordering packages? Or are they packages he'd ordered before getting isekai'd? Also, the sender is unknown, which doesn't add up with ordered - if Chippo had ordered those packages, then he would know who sent them. Do you think you could clarify that point in the blurb somehow?

This is overall good as a blurb, it sets up the character and the story nicely. I do have some grammar and structure adjustments, though, and I will improvise a bit on some details, feel free to correct if I'm off the mark.

After a break-up, Lia Lin Ai got into a fatal car accident. Strangely, a cupid offers her a second chance at life, putting Lia Lin Ai's soul into the body of a girl with a similar name. Without the memories of said girl, can Lin Ai live her life? What happens when her old connections come into the picture?

Ok, so, this packs a lot of info, which is great, but I'm having some trouble following the structure. I'm going to try to re-write this in a way I think would be clearer:

Li Yuan, Emperor of Tang Dynasty, Empress Fang, and Concubine Wu are in an entanglement. Two sons are born - the battle for the position of Empress begins.

Bloodshed and betrayal are the norm at the imperial court, and history tends to repeat itself. With one innocent already ruined and the land turned chaotic, the palace schemes of the three individuals will dictate the fate of the Tang Dynasty.

Will they choose right or wrong?

This sounds very interesting, but I think for the genre you're writing in, quite generic. Your last sentence could potentially apply to most VR stories out there. So I need to know what is it about your protagonist or your story's conflict that should make choose this one, over all the others. Who is your protagonist? And what is their specific story?