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Jun 2021

Here's mine :grin:
If anyone interested plz go for it :slight_smile:


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Well, first of all, I'd suggest to brush up a bit on your grammar.
It makes the conversations a bit awkward to read, like this:


He should be saying "Stop sleeping during class" or "Stop sleeping in the classroom".

You might luke to also look into rewriting this as the sentence makes no sense:

Another thing you might like to consider, is that when you show something, make sure that the reader understands what they are looking at.


I assume it's someone's side view from the neck down.
However, it could also be a penis.
This could be easily avoided by drawing all the way down to the hands, or even better, a front view.

This is the kind of stuff you learn with time, so don't despair.
It is clear that you know how to draw, now you just need to learn the language of comics and how drawings and panels interact with readers.
Keep going and it will all fall into place with time.

Thank you so much for your feedback :grin:
This would really helpful to me, am new to all these stuff, kind of confusing but am learning slowly, I hope sooner or later I'll get it..
Thank you once again, your feedback is really meant Alot :grin:..
May I know, how is my comic overall?

Unfortunately, I wouldn't be much help with that as I'm pretty sure I am not the target audience for this.
But don't worry too much.
I assume this is your first project, so use this as a learning tool more than anything else.

I agree with the commenter above once you clean up the grammar your art will take you far. Its honestly too early to give any good feedback as we haven't met the other I assume main character in the story but I would definitely like to see how it plays out.

Here's my comic if you want to give it a look and let me know what you think.

Hello, so I like the color palate you're using and the art style is nice over all. The arms/hands look a bit odd at times, but it might just be a style thing. Some actions don't need a description and you can use lines in place. Example the second episode we understand she got hit to wake up. You could just have actions lines surrounding that mini panel instead of words. Also, when going back into action you can either repeat the last panel from the last episode or just continue on. Try to avoid extra words. In the first panel of the third episode you didn't need the word hey as it was already established she was talking to her friend about the slap. She didn't need to get his attention again. Dialogue can be tricky to write, so beta readers may help before you spend effort drawing it all out (saves so much time and rewrites trust me). Overall, it is readable and looks nice. These are just nitpicky things to help you as you go forward.

Here's mine webtoon or tapas if you have time


Thank you so much for your feedback :slight_smile:
This would really helpful to me and I'll learn,
Thank you once again :grin:
Your art is really pretty :slight_smile:

Thanks. I will pass on the praise to my artist (I'm the writer my art style doesn't fit this story).

1 year later

ok for your first picture ( the boy) the porportions are off. The right eye should be less visible. and the neck should be thicker. And his back should be less curved.