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Oct 2024
3 months later

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OMG! Your feedback was golden. 🤩 Thanks so much for taking the time. :two_hearts: I’ll definitely be referring back to these comments as I continue my comic to see what I can continue to improve on. @justincarbunkle

Anyway, as for your comic, I do like the art style of your characters, it’s just that the comedy is kind of dark and heavy, which honestly in my opinion doesn’t often pair very well with the comedy aspect of the story. If the story was a bit more lighthearted it would definitely pair with your characters a bit better, however I can understand if this is not the genre of comedy you are going for (because I do know that there is a dark comedy and a light comedy). Also pls be aware that I’m not entirely into dark comedy so my opinion might be a little biased.

The one thing I can confidently point out would be that the length of your episodes are way to long, maybe cut them in half, that’ll definitely impact the overall experience of your comic. I hope my critique wasn’t too harsh :joy:

Again I thank you for your constructive criticism, moving forward I’ll try to improve on the aspects you’ve pointed out across my comic as I create my future episodes. :blush:

I wish you much peace and good luck :v::v:

No prob! I’m glad you found my comments helpful.

I am going for a dark comedy with this series. The main characters are meant to be immortals that are losing their sense humanity, so they’re going to end up doing some pretty awful things. The series is also meant to be a riff on the adult animated cartoon genre, specifically long running series (Family Guy, The Simpsons). I’m not seeking out to be as graphic/offensive as possible, I just try to think up characters/stories that would be interesting to explore, and then as I write it, my sense of humor just often goes into that direction.

Did you find any of it funny? Comedy is really hard for me to write, I’m always revising and worrying if any of the things being said/done are funny or not. I don’t need every joke to be a gangbuster, but I want to make sure there’s enough humor that a reader is being entertained enough to keep reading.

I agree that I shouldn’t have uploaded the chapters like I did. It’s pretty vague to me what constitutes a “chapter/episode” of a webcomic. To me, a chapter would be the length of a chapter in a manga, or a comic book issue, yet most of the chapters I’ve read here are like an 8th the length of mine.

I still want this chapter length for the stories/characters I want to tell, but I’ll start uploading them only a third at a time. I think that’ll make the material easier digest in this format (and would also prob net me a lot more likes/views).

Thank you Bella. You’re the first person to give my comic honest feedback. Much appreciated. : )

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Hi @TheSequence I just wanted to let you know that I might be a little slow to review your work, I really do want to but I’m a bit busy at the moment, I will respond when I can. Thank you for your patience and understanding :slight_smile:

Hi! @TheSequence so I just sent a comment containing my review, I hope it helps. I am really looking forward to your next episode. Just send the episode update message and I’m there lol :wink: Wishing you an amazing weekend! :two_hearts: