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By this I mean making up culturally-relevant curse words for your characters to use in-story. In a serious context, of course: we are not discussing "what the frickeldyfrack" right now. ^^

Anyway, I'm a little 50/50 on this. When it's done badly, it can turn an otherwise compelling story into kind of a cringefest. '~'

But when it's done with a little consideration to the sound of the 'replacement words' and whatnot (curse words tend to have a certain 'sharpness' that makes them roll right off the tongue), I think it can work. Sometimes you have no other choice.

For instance, I'm writing a story in which the culture centers around a certain major religion. What's more, this religion doesn't have any gods or particularly prominent figures, which means common phrases like "oh my god" kinda have to disappear completely. :[ There's nothing to replace them with (although I am working on it).

This is actually a bigger problem for me personally, because I'm not really fond of profanity, so the little that I do use is all religiously-affiliated. 6_6; I've managed to keep 'damn', and 'hell' I justified by making it profane for a different reason: the religion in question doesn't have a concept of hell, so making references to it is considered pagan (acknowledging the existence of other religions ftw~).

Anyway, I have made a few thematically-appropriate 'replacement words'. I even have a list of possible ones...I just can never bring myself to use them. XD Every time an opportunity comes up, I just think "well, do I really want to risk breaking the momentum of this scene with a weird word?" And so I opt out of it altogether.
I've only used a replacement 3 times so far in this 29,000-word story: I think that statistic alone speaks volumes about how comfortable I am with this notion. ^^;

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Well if there are no gods then things that have to do with something that's undesirble or a pain can be used instead. For example: do people in that region deal with a lot of flooding? Curses about that could be done. "Flashing floods!" could be used in place of something like "Holy fuck".

Anyway don't worry about the "weird word" thing either. It reveals what people have that's problematic or what they care about. Or even their upbringing.

You could always use "fiddle-faddle"...LOL

I keep the profanity I use kinda light, but when I do drop one it's not on accident.

In my setting, the people, who have electronic enhancements as a part of their bodies, hate hackers, because hackers can screw up their vital electronic body parts. And the victim will likely not be able to repair them anymore, because the most of electronics manufacturing plants are already destroyed at the moment of the main events in the comics. Moreover, some hackers are known for hack and then blackmail people and extort their money for returning functional of their body parts.
That's why in my setting the word "hacker" is considered as indecent, and is synonym of a "bad person", but more rough. People here even sometimes replace word "fuck" with word "hack". :slight_smile:

You can try to think, who will cause disgust and ire of people in your setting, and make this a profanity as well. :joy:

I think it might be helpful to look at series/movies that have fictional religions and fictional profanity. I think Game of Thrones has a really good way of including profanity that doesn't stand out too much to the viewer while also building the characters and the world around them. For example something I always heard in GOT was "Seven hells!" is something similar to saying "What the hell!" and it refers to The Faith of the Seven which is one of the religions in GOT.

but also I feel like if you're that uncomfortable with it then do you really have to include it?
If you think about it from a readers perspective then I don't think they would miss the profanity really, most of the comics/stories I read barely have any profanity in them.

Cursing can be a good spice to use for world building as it shows what is held in reverence in your world by someone treating it profanely (that's what makes cursing offensive)

If your religious system values certain virtues, or avatars of them, those virtues or the names of the avatars could replace typical profanities.

If a title of high regard in the religion is 'prophet' or 'cleric,' those words could be used as oaths or curses instead of taking a deities name in vain. If the religion values things like creation, the universe, curse words like 'cosmos' are recognizable enough they won't throw the reader off and give hints and nods to what the belief system is about.

If you have developed the history of the religion enough it contains certain mythological events, curse words could reference those stories like 'seven plagues' or 'great fall' might work as well.

O_O No offense, but that's exactly the kind of 'cringefest' replacement I was talking about...Lord have mercy; that woke me right up...

Anyway, you make a good point about "undesirable" occurrences; I never even thought about using that angle. Thank you much~

Niiiice. I wish I could use that. ^^
The most generally undesirable people in my story are exorcists...which is pretty difficult to make into any kind of profanity vernacular...

I see what you mean, but it's not the profanity itself that I'm uncomfortable with (for the most part), it's the pressure to come up with good replacements for the profanity that can't exist. (Don't tell anyone, but I'm kind of a perfectionist)

URRGG YES THIS but it's really hard...Light is a big thing in this religion, and I recently came up with a way to use that, but unfortunately it lends itself more to positive interjections...
Something to do with shapes/geometry would be nice...electromagnetism would be good, too...one of these days I gotta go on another Wikipedia rampage and hunt for more words...

I manage to avoid most profanity in my writing when they occur in a setting removed from our current reality.
At most I have "Oh for gods' sakes" uttered by a pagan character.

I suppose if you do want to include story-specific swears to demonstrate a bit of how their society works, you can ascribe them to a more 'corny' character if the swears make you cringe.

The type of swearing that makes me cringe the most though is when the narrator uses the word 'fuck' or any form of it when the story isn't even told in first person.

In my fantasy novel, some of my characters say "Ravens", because commoners see them as a sign of bad luck.

Some have a belief system or something akin to religion, which is similar to Heaven, Earth, and Hell. For instance, there's a moral code called The Twice Precepts of Pain, so I have them swear by saying "Twice".

To avoid making it a "cringe-fest", I don't have them curse a lot.

I’ve experienced the same thing as you! I’ve had to come up with different exclamations for things like “oh my god” and “jesus...” for some of my characters.

Also, I curse like a sailor throughout my story. I guess I just curse like a sailor in general (so do my friends and siblings) so I do it in a way that feels natural to me. But I have tried to look from the outside in as someone who doesn’t cuss a lot and I’ve tamed it down. I’ve even gone back and switch some cursing with other alternatives to lessen it.

But it does take place on a military encampment mostly, so I think I can get away with some rugged cussing :joy:.

You can always use “Oh my days!” But that’s a little floofy(cringe) sounding. “Oh man...” “holy hell” “no way...” “You’ve got to be kidding...” Things like that might work sometimes.

I am definitely not a stranger to any word you can think of, but I do think there is a time and a place. Like when a character is being condescending to someone else. I feel like not being profane when your being condescending packs a bigger punch, because it's almost as if you're talking to a child.

I don't have a lot say about this matter but if the generally undesirable people in your story are exorcists;
may I suggest, that a word for indecent people could be along the lines of "xor" or "cist"? Sorry if I'm not adding much to the conversation, but I just felt the need to share!

but why not use the school appropriate alternatives?
oh my god -> Oh my gosh / Oh my goodness
dammit -> darn it
For Fuck's sake -> For crying out loud
What the hell/fuck -> What the heck
Fuck you -> Piss off (Although technically still not allowed to be said on US radio before 10 pm XD)
etc etc I mean there's a PG version to just about every swear word.

I mean I just do it just to do it. If it fits in context, I keep it. If it doesn't, I remove it. :stuck_out_tongue:

Ya, I do use those as much as I can...but they do lack a certain something in some cases.

If a mother loses her child and starts wailing "Oh my god...OH MY GOD" you can see that, right?
But if instead she went "Oh my gosh...OH MY GOSH" it's kinda like....eeeeehh.... It doesn't really carry the same weight. Out of context, it almost sounds like she's excited her kid is dead. XD

true true. I do think in that specific example, a mom could just say "no" over and over, but yeah there are definitely situations that call for a more intense reaction.

Instead of creating profanity, I usually keep the curses to a bare minimum. It often has a larger impact if not used often in the story or by a particular character.

When an intense moment happens (good or bad), and a curse slips out, it can help emphasizes the feelings involved.

So if you're 50/50 on using replacement-curses, I'd say to minimize the level of profanity in your work and leave them for more intense moments.

It sounds like you have the right idea, going through words related to light or perhaps even the word 'light' in other languages that would be analogous to your world's culture and using that as the intensifying curse word. At least in English, curse words tend to have a hard sound at the end like **ck or **it. Finding synonyms for light like 'blaze' or 'glare' or antonyms like 'shade' that have that hard, sharp ending sound might fit.