here's my two cents on some of these recent comics inn this thread. I hope they help! And good luck everyone on continuing your comics!
@Lucius I think your faces and expressions are cool, and some of your panels have cool effects! I especially like page 12 with the no/yes bit. However, I got quite confused reading it. I struggled telling apart some of your characters (especially Aveline and her brother at the end of the chapter), and also generally situating the story. Perhaps it might help to have some establishing shots, or world build visually? The comic DID make more sense on my second read through, although some of the things we should know (eg Vance has minions) aren't established and come a bit out of nowhere? I actually don't mind the hatching style, but I think it works best as on the last panel of pg 28, because its giving depth. Maybe try playing more with block black and white? Good luck going forward!
@PaulDevers Maybe I shouldn't be commenting since I did end up subscribing lol! Really liked your characters' personality and voices, and your art was clear and fun! The main problem was that the pace to the reveal is too slow, I think you could even start it with Jamie pulling into the gas station -- how you write your characters is strong enough to establish their relationship/character in just a few pages! Also, I find that long openings sort of give a sense of epic 'grandiose', like they're setting up the calm before the storm, which (from what I've read so far) I don't think your comic is going for. But, as I said I'm now a reader and I'm looking forward to seeing where the story goes!
@OttoGruenwald Your art is absolutely gorgeous! However, this is probably because the types of stories I like to read aren't sci-fi or the other genres you're playing with, but I'm afraid your start didn't really grab my attention. The exposition goes on for far too long, and I don't have any characters to really care about or apply this all to. Also, when it starts with multi-universe levels of threat, it feels all a bit much, and I'm unsure how the threats/scale will get larger as the story goes on to maintain narrative tension? However, I have a feeling that people who like your genres will have a much better reaction than I did because there's definitely a lot of creativity and skill in the comic (the design for Spectro is awesome!)!!
@sneha Your comics are very cute, and your art is lovely! But I'd maybe consider revisiting the comedic pace of your comics? With the 2nd and 4th episode, the punchline comes with 'step 3' but I think comedic comics often put the punchline in a step 4, since it gives more time to subvert expectations? Also maybe exaggerating some of your experiences can add to the humour? I do adore your art style though!
@revisionstudios What a cool comic! I have nothing bad to say about your art, characters or dialogue, they all work really well! My main criticisms stem from my own preferences. I found some of the opening quite... trope-y? Not to say tropes are inherently bad, but your main character fit into the sort of 'smug arrogant mercenary', and the miracle drug, the monster and the quite generic dialogue from the soldiers didn't have anything that stood out to me as something new. I also am not really a fan of starting a story with a fight scene, I find it quite over done and it makes things too dramatic too fast in my opinion? Like I said though, this is probably a personal preference, and I think does work for the story you seem to be telling! I actually did really like chapter 2, the characters personalities were fleshed out and their interaction was really fun! I don't have the time to read it all, but I'm saving it away hopefully to binge it all when I have more time free!
If anyone wants to rip my comic apart here you go.
Openings are always my weakest parts so I'd be curious to get feedback!