Four young men with similar secrets move into an apartment with each other having never met before (to their knowledge). They quickly become close and there is even romantic connections being formed. Magical forces become involved in their lives, though the main focus is still on their relationships with each other.
I feel like there’s some confusion in this thread between elevator pitches and log lines!!!
The best example I could find for the distinction between the two is this:
Elevator pitch:
“ Granny is a horror movie. It’s about a serial killer who kills teenagers who violate the rules of etiquette.”
Logline:
“ Saddened by her mother’s death, a lonely teen must confront a woman claiming to be her grandmother, whose strict rules lead to a psychotic murder spree.”
I hope this helps
All-Star Squadron falls into an episode of The Outer Limits.
Superman, but he's like the main characters of the Outer Limits episodes Soldier and Behold, Eck!
A combination of Bizarro and Specter falls into pre-crisis Earth-2.
A confused white blood cell from a living universe causes trouble in an alternate WW2. He's opposed by a burned-out Dr. Strange who wants to destroy him and a golden-hearted man made of light that wants to understand him.
My comic's still real early in the story, so the whole plot necessarily hasn't been revealed yet. However,
a serious elevator pitch:
"Scarfs just can't seem to catch a break. As if things weren't bad enough already, now the fate of humanity rests in her hands- but here's the thing: she doesn't know if it's worth saving or not."
a non serious elevator pitch:
"A comic about good moms and bad moms, not moms and vodka aunts."
Me: Okay, here is my pitch. How about '50 Shades of Grey' but genderswapped.
Some Fictional Publisher: Ah yes people do like "50 Shades of Grey" but it already would be niche with a Female Domme...
Me: and the relationship slowly unraveled into being as toxic and unhealthy as critics of '50 Shades of Grey' think it should be.
Publisher: Wait so would this be a romance then or more of criminal tale-
Me: And the 'Grey' woman is actually the Head of a Mafia family and her paramour is a sidekick of the vigilante trying to take her down.
Publisher: Okay so this is sounding more like those Marvel comic things-
Me: Oh yeah and the 'grey' Character has super powers and her mafia family is based off of the seven sins-
Publisher: Okay scale it back now, I have no idea what niche you are trying to fit in here. Is it a romance? Thriller? Is it YA even though there is a '50 Shades' kink factor? What are you-
Me: And 'Grey' character is a Black Woman who was a child soldier and the 'Ana' character is basically a male Ana but with blue eyes and the 'crackhead mother' back story!
Publisher:...get out.
(That's how imagine it would go anyways...)
"Two dumb teenagers are on a road trip in 1 a 970's America, searching for the dark secrets to overcome in both of their hearts."
That's the best I got here on the forums for now. I really, really wish I was farther along, because GIMMICK happens soon and I would 100% include that in a pitch, but I can't just spew it out onto the forums. But, y'know, this is what I got now!
I know what an elevator pitch is, but in grad school they overused that idea so much that every time I hear it I just cringe. If in the situation I just say somethin like: "It's a scifi drama-adventure that some friends and I made up, and then I adapted it to a comic format. Here is the link if you want to check it out"
The main objective is to keep it short and to the point. For example, here's the one for my webcomic, Bethellium.
In a world where magic is almost extinct, there's still one hidden city where magic is being preserved. Follow the adventures of the five sorceresses that will see the Magic City of Bethellium become legend.
That is like, my worst nightmare lol. It was hard enough just writing a description for my actual comic, since there is so much going on. When people ask what it's about, I usually just say:
"A reaper, like the grim reaper, instead he's small and fuzzy and cute, and he saves children. And one day, he unexpectedly becomes the legal guardian of a very innocent human girl after saving her."
But that honestly doesn't scratch the surface, because there's a bigger story at play about the turf wars of a psychically-gifted queen and the young cannibalistic princess who's father she murdered. About a secret organized crime group who knows how to universe-hop and steals and uses the blood of humans in order to do it. A reptillian beast who uses everyone like a puppet so that he can play God.
There's waaaaay too much sht going on to pitch in a sentence or two lmao.