Hey yall! I just uploaded my first comic ever and would really like some feedback for it!
I was hoping to do a feedback for feedback sort of thing, so feel to free to ask for some feedback as well!
Jul '18
Jul '18
Even though it's still too early to be asking for reviews, what you have so far still gives me a few questions that make me guess. I can't judge artwork since i'm no expert and barely an amateur but your design for Ryu gives an obvious friendly demeanor which makes me wonder what May might look like. I advise you to work at this carefully.
You can take a whack at mine if you like.
its a good start for a comic , art is something that grows in time, but you set the story tone well
introduced the main character , keep going 
have a look at a comic i help with plz
Cool man! I just started my first webcomic too:) And I always appreciate feedback!
Im surpised I liked the first episode! Im not much into gl but this seems pretty goddamn adorable. Nice likeable character. Nice reading pace. Nice storytelling device. And overall it was a very enjoyable first episode:) Im looking forward to more keep it up!
The art isnt great but it isnt cringe worthy. But you'll improve overtime... but just so ya know this guys yt channel is a fantastic resource if your looking to improve: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UClM2LuQ1q5WEc23462tQzBg1
@sakisaki11213
Your comic is still new but, I'll say what I can say right now.
-You introduced the main character and you communicated to the audience her personality and character without directly stating her personality. (Well I'm assuming her personality from your use of facial expressions, she is cheerful and can be shy)
-The art style is consistent, nothing really looks out of place, it's simplistic and consistently simplistic. Although a nitpicky thing is that the first and last panel of the first post has some of the image bleeding out of the panel (Says me, I always have trouble keeping images within a panel 
), but its very minor, so you don't have to change it, but you can if you wish.
-The story is understandable so far, it introduces the character and it seems as though, she is recording herself on a camera telling how she moved with a character named 'Doctor May' and it is currently her twelfth day with Doctor May. She states that she doesn't remember anything before she started living with Doctor May, which can hint to various possibilities on the main character's Ryuka's origin. From the second last panel, it seems as though Ryuka isn't supposed to use the camera or something? Although I didn't understand the last panel's dialogue, you can change that if its a mistake don't if either that's intentional or I'm just too dumb to understand.
Great start so far! I wish you luck on your comic!
Here's my comic, if you have time, you can review mine!
Thank you so much for the advice!
I checked out your comic and so far its really good. Most of the comedy works and pacing is awesome! If anything the only recommendation I have is probably to color your comics, as hard as it sounds its really worth it once you realize the level of contrast it adds to your panels. :3
Thanks for the feedback! >w< I'm still working on my art style... and my art in general ;w; but I'm hoping to improve over time.
Also thanks for introducing me to your comic its hilarious! The characters are really loveable and the humor is amazing! >w<
Thanks for the feedback! I just checked out your comic too and I have to say its pretty awesome! Your art style works really well with the monotone colors, and the characters are relatable. If there's one thing I have to point out it would be Rudy's eyes, the rough edges can be a bit off putting. But otherwise amazing comic!
Salutations. Well, since we're only one page in I don't have a ton of feedback, however, there are some things that I noticed that I'll share.
In the third panel from the top her left hand is on backwards. If she's going to point at her face, her index finger would be on the outside of her hand, not the inside. Try it yourself, point at your own face with your index finger just as she's doing, with your left hand. You'll notice that the index finger is on the outside of your hand and that your other fingers will be under your chin, rather than being on the outside of the hand. If you ever need a reference, you can look online or in the mirror at home for some of the simple stuff, like with hands or facial expressions etc.
Another thing I noticed is that, you have spelling errors. On your introductory page, when you say Doctor May's name, May isn't capitalized and it should be, in fact there are a couple of instances where Doctor May's name isn't capitalized, so I'd go back and edit that so your audience doesn't get confused. You also have a spelling error in this line - "To preserve my memories incase they get wiped sagain." Those bolded words should be "in case" and "again". Another issue with dialogue: In the first page you say Doctor May's name four times, almost every other dialogue box. Once you've established a character's name, repeating it a lot is actually distracting to a reader.
I'll give an example. Say you're talking to a new friend and they start off like this:
I live with my roommate Jim, Jim is good at X. I'm trying to work on projects with Jim and while I'm very busy Jim likes to laze about. Jim isn't very good at staying on task, but I like Jim. Jim's got a good sense of humor.
See how overuse of a name can start to make you as a reader have pause? Once you introduce a character, you don't need their name constantly. I'll make an example of your dialogue so that you can see what I mean:
Edited: - "Hi, my name is Ryuka and I'm an assistant for Doctor May. Today marks my twelfth day with her, and I've learned so much since I've moved here. Unfortunately I don't remember anything before I started living here, and I'm afraid I might forget the precious memories I've made with her."
Now, you do not have to redo your dialogue in this exact way. This is just an example. This falls more along the lines of narrative dialogue flow. If you reiterate a name too many times, it'll begin to stand out and hamper your dialogue. This also goes for overuse of any word, so I've got this here that can help you edit dialogue and catch misspelled words, and so on. Now, some of the suggestions Editminion makes is more for novelists than for comic dialogue so, it's okay if you don't take all of the advice it gives, however, if you don't have a way to catch misspelled words, when you write your text in the dialogue box, it red-lines the text that's misspelled so, I figured it could help.
In regards to the actual art style it's nice, your lines are clean, you've got a nice color scheme so far, you'll just have to practice proportions and a few fundamentals here and there, but ultimately those come with time and you're well on your way anyhow. You're going to do just fine if you keep at it and look out for spelling errors. I hope this feedback helps you and here's wishing you luck with your new comic! 
Fair is fair, if you've got any feedback for me, I'd love to hear it.
Dude thank you so much for the feedback! It was super comprehensive!
As for your comic, its really awesome! The art is phenomenal, like something in the somebody in the comic book industry would make. And although fantasy stories aren't really my cup of tea your comic captured my attention. Well... I don't really know what else to say... its just really good. Ill just follow it
I can tell you're new to the game and that your art is a little underdeveloped, but the effort is clear and that means you can only improve. It still reads really nicely and the colour palette serves the mood really well. For a first update it's pretty strong.
You're definitely being adventurous by styling them similarly to video blogs. That definitely catches attention. You can do a lot of interesting things with this format so don't hold back with it! It's a useful gimmick to exploit if you're new to telling stories.
The premise is pretty fun as well. I think it will develop into a neat little story over time.
If you're interested in mine I'll just warn you it's violent and over the top... But if you like 80s action movies then it'll probably appeal to you.
yeah his design didn’t turn out the best but I’m too lazy to change it
