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Jun 2020

Been gone for a while as we reworked the pages. I'd love to hear what you guys think of my comic so far, in return of course I'll read yours and let you know what I think of it! If it's a long one I'll probably just read the first bit of it for a first impression and let you know what I think of it!

So here's22 a link to my comic. Just to let you know what you're getting into, this is a story about a world in which about 20 years ago people started being born with superpowers and this issue follows one of those people throughout his life.

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I think you have a solid start to your comic. I believe I read unmasked when it was in its early stages. Anyway, Chris, the main character has an interesting origin being born with superpowers as your description of people being born with powers already stated. I can see the story moving forward.

Hey, why not check out any of my series? I'll link the profile down below. Although, I should let you know that if you're tempted to click the most recently updated series, Amazement Originals, that's it's more of a collection of comedic/(sometimes action adventure) short stories that INCLUDE all of the characters that exist within my mainstream universe of comics. So it'll be light-hearted as opposed to some of my more mature comic series. Cheers:

Thanks so much for your opinion! You probably did read it back then because I for sure remember reading yours, I think your comic is a lot of fun, I really like the unique characters like living fruits. I like that it's pretty easy to read in bite sized pieces and I think one area you really excel at is the more lighthearted comedy side. I'm not saying the more serious stuff isn't fun but your lighthearted writing reminds me a lot of short little comics I would read before going to work/school. Keep up the good work!

Hey just read through and subscribed! I like the gritty style it reminds me a lot of DC comics. I think your characters are really solid and the plot has a lot potential. Also those pages must take you forever so mad respect! Anyone who can manage full color and not go insane is a hero

If you want you can come by mine! Its a black and white horror about a few young boys and their encounter with a wendigo. Its my first real comic so I'm still learning a lot but I'm excited about it it still!

It needs work. Chris wants to be a hero but "why" is kinda unbelievable since this drive for being a hero would have probably happened in his childhood years regardless of his dad's opinions. Even that piece of information about his dad not liking supers is extremely tiny to the point that i thought it didn't affect Chris all that much but when he tells Golem that he didn't pursue hero stuff because of his dad, it's odd. Plus the whole "wants to be the hero, just cause" feels empty.

Anna seems like someone who kinda wanted Chris to become a hero and then does an understandable 180. But the way you presented it made it seem like Anna was against it from the beginning. You should've showed her regret letting Chris go instead of making it seem like it was all his fault.

The guild concept is presented well in the beginning but when Golem and Chris meet, it's not lengthy enough. Golem should have done more to present the Guild as something serious like the Justice League. Instead, with the short time, it made Golem seem a bit OP and the Guild unnecessary since fights with powerful people like Bruiser can just end quickly despite his upper hand moments ago.

Overall you do have good concepts but the way you're presenting them isn't enough. Being a hero for no other reason than being a hero is good but you should've presented the great things about being a hero that makes it such an interesting way of life. Anna seems like a relatable girlfriend to a wannabe hero, but you should've presented her as more concerned and regretful of her earlier support to show her change as a person even if it's a simple change. And the Guild, rather the hero concept should be expanded upon, though for now i only see a problem with your fight scenes when supers are involved. You gotta make those fights more "back and forth" with a little more thought into each action.

This is my first time reviewing a comic, so i'll be having trouble coming up with words to use here.

The art style looked exactly like traditional comic books, fitting the super hero theme of the story. It did come out pretty decent, but can sometimes be dark, mostly due to everyone refusing to accept super powered people for some reason. Like, sheesh, he was just giving you your purse back.

Anyways, this is me trying to do my best at making my first review, sorry if it came out as half-assed.

Since you said you'll do the same to my comic, i'll send this link here.

I’m only on page 4 but I love how soft the color pallet is! I don't usually read comics (Like one or two) but this one really interested me! The visuals were nice, nothing crowded one panel and it was over all nice. My only problem would be how small the text is. It makes reading just a little bit difficult but I just suck at reading small words so it might not be a problem but just a preference.

My comic is only 1% complete with the first 6 pages being uploaded. Not enough for a proper critique but it’s all I have so far. Working on pages 7-8 currently, maybe posting 5 at a time. Dunno yet.

Genre: Fantasy

Note: I am aware of a spelling error in the first few panels. Don’t say anything about it because I already know

I think your comic is really interesting! Really gives marvel feels to me.
The only kind of bad thing that I could see was the pacing. I felt like it just went by too fast.
I think your paneling is really good. Your art is good too!

The art at the start of my comic is very different from the most recent update : )
My comic is crime/mystery

Hey thank you so much! I read through the first issue you've got wow what a crazy unique setting. I loved the style you have for these characters and plot got me right hooked in. if it weren't for the fact that I have to work in the morning honestly I probably would have binged everything you have tonight. Keep up the good work I love mysterious monster stories!

Hey I appreciate your brutal honesty because that's the exact kind of thing I want to hear. I'm sorry to hear that you didn't quite find it all that well but you've left me with some really good points to think about for the future as I work and improve on my writing. Thank you again for writing out such a long and detailed response detailing your thoughts. I will agree for sure on two points, I do think my pacing for this was a little fast, I think I may have trimmed a bit too much "fat" and it may have made for a more rushed feel. Fights I knew were going to be an issue from the start because I don't love watching fights in comics and instead like to hear more about the heroes lives. But like I said you gave me a lot to think about as I work on ways to improve.

Hey, I appreciate you making the effort to give me your opinion on my comic even if it was your first time doing a review I think you did a fine job. So I only had time to read through your first 3 parts but I thought it was a really neat concept, I love the over-exaggerated facial expressions that people make and the art style I thought was not only really unique but also sent me on a nostalgia trip. Something about the art style really made me think of Flipnote for the DSi . Overall though I thought it was fun.

Thank you for your review, text size is for sure something that could probably be improved I agree there (but I need glasses so what do I know). I think what you have works for a neat prologue and a good start. There isn't much plot wise that I can talk about but I thought it seemed interesting with those text bubbles that seemed to be building up to something. The colours you use I found to be very soft which was nice and I hope you continue. As for typos don't worry about it, you're still starting off and you got plenty of time to make edits. My comic was full of little typos when I started it.

Thanks for taking the time to check out my comic and yeah I think when I was trimming the "fat" I cut a bit too much which left my comic feeling a bit more rushed sadly.

So I read though yours to about page 16 and I thought it seemed like a fun adventure with a group of teenagers who happen to be animals. I like the characters they feel like something I would see in a slice of life cartoon, the pacing was nice and all in all it seemed like a a good time. Keep up the good work.

Holy dingle! those flipnote animations really do resemble my art style, even though i've never hear of them. Thx btw.

Yeah plot wise I feel I’m building up to nothing… I’m trying to be different by making the text box colors fade or something but it seems a little extra. Glad to see that you like the color pallet.