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I'm doing some work on a character and I can't decide which color palette I prefer. For context, this is Ash, he is a goblin. In his world goblins are forest people, but they are treated about the same as humans and elves. V1. [image] V2. [image] Which do you prefer?
Which book cover do you guys prefer? And is there any particular reason why? [image] [image] [image]
I gave the first chapter a read and it's not for me if I'm being honest. There are a few contradictions in reasoning and progression of thought, but I won't go into that unless you want. I think there's some good, but judging the first chapter from a logic chain perspective, I'm not certain a lot of…
New Strings takes place in a sort of cyberpunk broken world future. I was wondering if anyone else is writing any stories or making comics that take place in a similar setting. How do you think you're distinguishing it from other similar works. New Strings is still pretty new, but it has a few eleme…
I can somewhat agree with all of that but I'd say the way a couple falls in love doesn't matter as much as how and why they stay together or eventually break up. I personally hate romance stories where couples have nothing in common or anything they actually like about each other. I'm even ok wit…
A couple that I noticed are It was at that moment I realized I could not kill this child. Past tense would be The child, a child, that child No nine year old could be OK at this moment. Past tense would be That moment "Analina was now holding on to me," Past tense would be Was then …
What were the places you thought I misplaced words? And I suppose I can understand how some of the writing can seem foreign or complicated, but it's not done to make things sound cool or ancient it's because the main character comes from a place without humans that sees itself above humans but is…
I gave the prolog and first chapter a read and they both have a distinct problem. Everything is very flat and on the nose. Characters speak in the most direct way as if they know they're being watched and have to progress the story. For example If the mom is talking to her kids about their fat…
Most of my experienc is in writing. I've written scripts for movies and skits and comics, but majority of my work is books novels and the like. I have a degree in graphic design, so I believe I have a grasp on visual art, but it hasn't been my main tool for a while. I've taken on the challenge…
This thread was meant more so for novels, written stories.
There was quite a bit in your story to be helped. You have a lot of unnecessary spacing that actually makes your story seem unprofessional and unedited upon first glance. Overly complicated or too wordy sentences, for example "A head was peeking out the brightly lit window." Could have b…
That is a good point I had missed.
Currently I own a website called blackdoor.online , but recently I've been considering rebranding and using a new name. When I first started, most of my stories were about mature content or stories with horror elements, but I've moved more towards a wider variety of genres. I don't want people to…
I'll be honest I didn't connect much with you're story. The opening felt like a history/anatomy lesson that could have been explained in another way. The dialog at times felt stiff or scripted. And I found myself having to push myself to keep reading. You also slip in and out of past and present-…
You have quite a few run on sentences. I know you have thoughts that naturally go together and when you say them out loud they sound fine, but breaking up these thoughts into their own sentences will help the reader digest the material. It also allows you more variety in sentence structure. I have a…
So I find the idea of gaining an ability through their past traumatic event of losing a friend is interesting, but if that is what's happening I'm not entirely sure how that trauma created the dream power. I'm also not very convinced that she would, after only experiencing the ability twice witho…
I have a story that I've been working to get in front of new eyes called Halo City Angel. If you'll have a read I'll be more than happy to do the same. All that I ask is that you remember to also let me know what you think here, or leave a comment there. I'll do the same. You can give feedback on…
I can definitely see where you're coming from, and I can't disagree that in many cases some writers use their worlds to hide behind (worst turn a fiction book into a fictional history book). But I think world building when done right is a critical thing in a story. I feel it should be interwoven so …
So I've been thinking about world building lately. I've read books written by war vets capable of telling detailed combat scenes. And I've read books by people who write about dragons and magic. I find both to be compelling, but it interests me how one person's story is great because of how close…
I wrote this story once where evil dolls came to life, and they were kidnapping people in the toy section of a store. I'm dyslexic. I believe I have a good grasp and understanding of words, but spelling them can be a challenge because I tend to spell things the way they sound And I can, at …
So the voice is too cold you think? I actually spent a while looking for a voice that wasn't expensive but didn't sound like a robot lol. I landed on this one because I thought it was one of the more human sounding, but I can understand if it still has an unnatural edge if that's what you're saying.…
I'm trying to start using YouTube more to promote my stories. However, I'm limited in funds and resources I can currently do things with in video. I know some people will tell me to learn how to animate things or pay someone to animate stuff for me, but it takes time to learn those skills, and it co…
I think that while you may have achieved a sense of unity in style and color, these designs all (in my opinion) look very busy and cluttered. Not only will these designs be a pain to redraw over and over again, I think visually they will be distracting and tiring to readers. Everything has a sort…
Lol yes I am 26 years old, but I live the life of a particularly old man. But to be honest social media and me have just never clicked. I know it's a crucial part of everything but part of me always feels idk disingenuous for trying to sell people on things. And then to use social media I have to…
Yeah more so for something completely dedicated to writing. But I'll still check it out, could be a good pool to test the waters.
I'll check it out. Side not, despite being in my 20s, I am a tech idiot. A true failure of my particular generation. Couldn't tell you how to use Twitter or Instagram (tho I'm still trying lol) but you mentioned advertising on Ticktock? How do you go about promoting there? Or does it work best fo…
I'll check it out now!
I hear you, but I was more so referring to a place for writen works. I could be wrong, but I feel like Tapas is geared more for its comics than it's novels, which is fine of course. They have to make something their focus. And I have found a bit of success for my stories despite whether Tapas is mor…